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Date formats are all now consistent, and the ref is fixed. We are now down to two sentences beginning with "athletes", and I could easily get it down to just one, if you prefer. I am working on finding a source for the gymnast thing, and will have alternative text within the next few days, as well as
634:"In the uneven bars final, Chinese gymnast He Kexin and American Nastia Liukin tied with final marks of 16.725, and earned identical A and B-panel scores of 7.70 and 9.025, respectively. The gold medal was awarded to He and the silver to Liukin due to recent rules changes in the tie-breaking system."
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The second, third and fourth paragraphs of this section need better organization. It goes from the relay to a random
Tibetan protest to the relay to the conclusion that it was a "PR disaster" back to the relay, to another protest and again the relay. Since the protests were on the international
625:- To do what, lead in gold medals? Also, I would break this sentence into two: "Athletes from China won 51 gold medals, the most of any nation at these Olympics. China became the first nation other than the United States and Russia (Soviet Union) to lead in gold medals since <country: -->
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The paragraph on the motto is a little disjointed. It starts with the unveiling and an explanation, then the
Tibetan protest, then back to explaining it. I would suggest moving the protest parts to the end of the paragraph, and perhaps break the mascots and pictograms into their own
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I've gone ahead and just hidden it for now. I'm not sure what direction that table will take, but that is a discussion for the
Olympics project members. With that, I have no further objections, and am promoting this article. Cheers!
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Ok, that looks better. I think there could be room to add more info on various important medalists, but I might consider that a one difference between GA and FA. All of my original comments are resolved, however
623:"Athletes from China won 51 gold medals, the most of any nation at these Olympics, becoming the first nation other than the United States and Russia (Soviet Union) to do so since the 1936 Summer Olympics."
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So is ref 69, even though it didn't show up in the checklinks report. I would probably take a look at all olympic.org links that don't have a webcite archive and search for replacements as needed.
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Looks good overall. Some small prose concerns, and some references needing to be updated, and I think this article will be there. Accordingly, I am placing on hold for the time being. Regards,
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That is it for a start. Though there are some concerns, I think all are easily fixable at this point. I will continue with a review of the prose, hopefully later today. Regards,
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Mostly there. I think all I have outstanding now is the medal count section. Also, current reference 64 (The Live Feed) is dead. But we're almost there! Cheers,
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but that remains incomplete. I would suggest working with them to either complete or replace/remove the table, at which point I will pass the article. Cheers!
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Ref 44 supports all claims, except that the torch could stay lit in temperatures as cold as -40c. Please find a source that supports the temperature or remove.
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I think I've implemented all the above suggestions. If I've missed anything, or if you think anything could be done a little better, just let me know. Thanks!
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I've cleared up two of the three Lead issues and will probably be able to do much more tomorrow night. Thanks for starting the review!
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