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Classification section has a lot of that information so you could just summarize some of that and put it as your lead. I would use your second paragraph under your classification section as your lead. Then you could add in The number of speakers, then that would be a pretty good lead. In your history tab second sentence should be "homeland of austronesian languages." In the second sentence of the third paragraph in the history tab, I recommend taking out the "who is" that's before HG Johnson. As far as your structure goes though I think the structure is excellent. The flow of the article makes sense. I do recommend making a separate section for demography. Also maybe delete the section names for sections you don't have information for by the time the final is due. In your phonology section, I think you should explain some of the more technical words. Such as lenis and spirantized because I don't think a lot of people are going to know what those words mean. Oh and in your alphabets section, I think you mean to say letters, not alphabets. As in 28 letters.Your writing is non-biased which is good and your information seems solid. The only things I could see were that you have some small spelling and grammar mistakes. I've listed a few throughout this review but I recommend reading through your article to find those. For example I think you spelled usually wrong and least wrong. Also in your resources, you seem to have the same source listed 6 times. You should take that out just list each source once. If you want to reuse a source use the cite and then reuse a source option to use it again. Some final things is I recommend adding some morphology information if possible to balance out all the history information that you have. These are the things I recommend editing.
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