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the lead is difficult, too many words the average reader is not likely to understand. Can anything be done to simplify this a bit? Also consider making it more explicitly clear why this discovery is important in the paleontological scheme of things. Eg., something like this sentence from
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I usually vary between these two (and a few others, like "well-developed") to say the same thing. Flynn et al. also use "strong" in reference to the cingulum, and they say the premolar is "dominated" by the central
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Thanks for the review. I would like to make the article about this interesting mammal actually comprehensible, so I'll try hard to improve it, but don't have more time right now, so I'll come back later today.
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I have added something similar to that. I do think the lead needs to give some description of the animal—after all, it's the distinctive morphology that give this animal (arguably the oldest known
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Thanks again! (To pre-empt one point: I am not aware of any reconstructions whatsoever of the biology of this animal, or of the early australosphenidans in general.)
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extends backwards the known temporal range of the tribosphenic tooth by some 25 Ma, which is equivalent to about 20% of its previous known history."
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are the same thing until a second species is discovered. But I added "genus" anyway; it is a useful point of clarification.
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It's much better, there's enough context around the redlinked terms that I can mostly understand what I'm reading now :)
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