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chapter. The difference is minor, in some wording, spelling too (one spells it
Kutichaka, the other Kutichara), but the chief points are indeed the same. There is no mention of "living with family or a family member" in Bhikshuka. Not in Ashrama either. Ashrama does say, "Kuticharas" visit and beg for 8 mouthfuls of food per day from their own family. "Kuticharas" is a Sanskrit word that means "cottage or hut visitors", contextually meaning here to be someone who goes from one cottage to another to beg. Your edits are fine, thanks. I will meditate on the 1st para of History and the sources a bit, then reword it, by tomorrow.
290:: one major aspect is that topics covered in the lead need to be covered in the body of the article. Yet almost none of the material in the opening paragraph appears in the body of the text: that it's a minor Upanishad, that it's written in Sanskrit, etc. Indeed, there is typically no need for inline citations in the lead section unless quotes or controversial information appears here, because the information should also appear in the body and be cited there, yet this has six separate citations (one of which appears twice).
905:(hut-visitors) are they who, carrying on begging in the houses of their children," which doesn't actually say they live with their family, just that the various family does (presumably) feed them. If the Bhikshuka doesn't specify the family connection, then it would be synthesis indeed to mention it because Ashrama does, though if this is a point of difference between the two Upanishads it might (or might not) be worth mentioning somewhere.
837:, I've just done a second pass, and in most places I've edited the article directly, including the Contents section and its two subsections, where I felt that repeating that each monk type seeks liberation only through yoga practice did not adhere to the "concise" part of the "clear and concise" GA criterion, so it's now only mentioned once, in the main section.
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sentence, "its authorship ... is believed to have been composed" (authorship is not composed), and "between the 14th and 15th centuries" (there's nothing between them); in the fourth, the repetition of "same substance" is problematic, as is the general tenor of the sentence: it is not clear to me whether the
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That's the initial pass through the article. There's a lot of work to be done here in terms of rewording; I'm sure there will be another round of requests. Please take especial care in the revisions that the resulting text is clear and concise, and does not introduce new issues while fixing old ones.
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After the recent revision, this section only actually deals with when the
Upanishad was created ("chronology") in the last half; its first half talks about other basic facts instead. The section is far from meeting the "clear and concise" GA prose requirement, and needs a major copyedit: in the third
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After the corrections, the first paragraph now ends in a comma, in the middle of an incomplete sentence. That's not good. Also, as noted in one of the other reviews, you should wikilink "recension". In addition, "serial order" isn't something that was mentioned in the other
Upanishad article I worked
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would appear to describe them as still living with a family member or with family, in their hut (a "hut" monk, if you will), on page 765 of
Deussen, but that description may not be in Bhikshuka. If there's anything more you can add to describe this type of monk, as a way of differentiating from the
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History is still problematic, as I do not understand what "same in substance" means as written. The Deussen source mentions "chief points"; it appears that while both cover the same groundâI believe the four types of monks are the same in both?âthey don't necessarily do it
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Sanskrit manuscripts and the Olivelle's Bhikshuka translation on page 236. For Kuticakas, we can only list the four names, eight mouthfuls and yogic path to moksha. Anything else may be WP:OR-synthesis. You are right about 'four types of monks' are same in Bhikshuka and Ashrama's 4th
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are these tracing to earlier works or to later ones? It's important to clarify this, especially as you're talking about "much later composed" (which should be displaced to after the
Upanishads mention) that could be much later than the Vedic works but still earlier than
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monks do average eight mouthfuls a day over time, but never the same from day to day. If there's something more to it than what was written here, then you may need to change my revisions. (Do the urine and dung count in the mouthful total? It might be useful to clarify
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I still need to find the time to check more of the sourcesâat least, those that are available to meâbut in the meantime you can work on the two issues that I've mentioned above, and also check to make sure that my edits did not do violence to the facts. Thanks.
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I reworded the 1st para of history section, and added a note of difference between the two texts. I picked the 'yogic path' detail because it is a significant difference that is present for all four monk types in the
Bhikshuka, but missing in the Ashrama.
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I don't quite follow the chain of causation in this section, especially the final sentence, which is oddly phrased: each monk becomes "an end in himself"? How does that accord with the goal of attaining moksha, or advancing far on the path to attain
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But you've changed it to "is listed", which is again indirect: it could be that the title of the
Upanishad is listed but the full contents are not included. Please be more careful: this is a GA review, so prose and meaning are very important.
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Upanishad, the word is "Sannyasa"; here, the word is rendered "Samnyasa" but still links to "Sannyasa". I think consistency across articles is a good idea unless there's a very strong reason to avoid it.
376:": this is a different form of the word than I've seen before, and its orthography is different as well: instead of capitalized regular type, it's lowercase italics. Again, see Jabala, and try for consistency.
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Would it make sense to somehow incorporate the single sentence after the first paragraph into this first paragraph? OR maybe it should be structured that way, as I see it is the lead for the mendicant monks.
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They seem to be used as alternate spellings, not as synonyms. If they mean similar but not identical things, then why do they link to the same article? You haven't given a very strong reason to avoid it.
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I'll get back to this when I can, but there are two other reviews I haven't yet posted anything to, and Jabala still to complete. It will probably take a few days; I am not a fast reviewer.
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I don't know why "Yoga" is capitalized; it certainly isn't in the "Yoga" article. I think lowercase is probably the best choice throughout the article.
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