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I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise
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I'm not sure what to do with this. I agree that this last sentence is a little awkward, but I don't think it needs to be explicit that it's the Grand
Circuit; that's mentioned in the immediately preceding sentence, so saying "grand" again would feel repetitive. I'm certainly open to suggestions on
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My understanding is that the "Fleetwood Park Club" was a private club owned by Bonner, located next to the racetrack. He did not own the racetrack, but was a member (and at one time the president) of the
Driving Club. I'll try to clarify this, but none of the sources I've found are explicit on
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There are a lot of short paragraphs - which gives a very choppy feel to the article. Can we combine some of them? Like the second and third paragraphs of The Club could be combined easily, I'd think, as an example. Likewise the second and third paragraphs of
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614:"The alternative locations in New York were Inwood, Oak Point-Barretto Point, Port Morris, Cedar Park, and Morningside Park-Riverside Park-Bloomingdale Asylum." doesn't add anything to the knowledge of the racetrack, suggest cutting this.
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The last two paragraphs are pure trivia and should be deleted. Neither the death of a local resident nor a small lawsuit over purely local concerns is really noteworthy and should just go.
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This got resolved by rearranging things; at the point where I now say "Members of the club", there's only one club that's been mentioned, so it's unambigious.
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Those changes look good, I can deal with the "circuit" issue staying as is. Passing this now!
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