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conservation techniques advanced, knowledge of contemporaneous helmets grew, and more helmet fragments were discovered during the 1965–69 re-excavation of Sutton Hoo; the limitations of Maryon's reconstruction—notably its diminished size, gaps in afforded protection, and lack of a moveable neck guard—became apparent"? Secondly, I wonder if "limitations" is quite the right word. They weren't "mistakes/errors" exactly. "Weaknesses"? Maybe it's no better?
454:"Over the succeeding quarter century conservation techniques advanced, knowledge of contemporaneous helmets grew, and limitations of Maryon's reconstruction—notably its diminished size, gaps in afforded protection, and lack of a moveable neck guard—became apparent; so too were more helmet fragments discovered during the 1965–69 re-excavation of Sutton Hoo" - This
511:"Made of hammered bronze plates less than a sixteenth of an inch thick, he suggested, it would have been supported there by a hanging piece of drapery acting as a third point of support" - perhaps, "Made of hammered bronze plates less than a sixteenth of an inch thick, Maryon suggested it would have been supported by a hanging piece of drapery acting as a third
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345:"on the night of October 25 "several hundred students of Armstrong College" tarred and feathered the statue, and required 80 police officers to be dispersed" - perhaps, "on the night of October 25 "several hundred students of Armstrong College" tarred and feathered the statue, and it required 80 police officers to disperse them"?
723:, not to mention the kind words. This is one of the first articles I created—and still one of those that I find most interesting—so your thorough look at it, and encouragement to take this to FAC (which I intend to do), is particularly welcome. I've responded to a few points above, and left a question about Pevsner. --
744:- A pleasure, as always. I agree re. the Colossus cites - they'd sit well in the article about the Dali, or the structure itself. As to the Pevsner, fortunately I have both the 1967 and the 2010 versions. I'll drop the details, and the full quotes, here this evening. It will make a fine FA. All the best.
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Personally, I'm not certain the, very large, number of
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266:"a 1901 plaque memorialising Bernard Gilpin unveiled in St Cuthbert's Church, Kentmere; described by the art historian Sir Nikolaus Pevsner as 'Arts and Crafts, almost Art Nouveau' - purely as an aside, while the 1967 Pevsner says exactly this, the 2010 revision drops the "Arts and Crafts" element.
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Very pleased to pick this one up. It is as plain as day it meets, and far exceeds, the standard for GA, and my review will do little more than make a few suggestions. As an aside, I wonder whether GA is the best route to FA for this, a destination it should certainly be headed towards? Mr Riley
671:—and they may shed some light on how Dalà came to hear about Maryon's theory. One idea I have wondered about is by sorting these in footnote 7 by geographic location (e.g., by country, province, state, etc.) to demonstrate the geographic reach of the idea; do you think this would be worthwhile?
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You're probably right about this. It's largely a byproduct of the fact that when I started researching Maryon I collected as many sources as I could, and there is a disproportionate number of sources about the
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I've reformatted it somewhat, putting a "Personal life" section (with marriages, children, and death) at the end, and removing this from the earlier section, which I've now titled "Early life and education."
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236:"Herbert Maryon studied from 1896 to 1900 at the Polytechnic (probably Regent Street)" - should this be "London Polytechnic", or "a polytechnic college"? And does it need the Herbert here?
659:: 51 that are listed here, and probably far more that are not. These clippings probably have some relevance to the painting itself—in its article, I've linked the list under
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a reviewer for The Studio of an exhibition at the Royal Albert Hall commented..." - A little infelicitous? Perhaps, "Soon after Maryon's hiring, a reviewer..."?
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