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Since it's the only team he played for and he only played in one season, I think you can drop the (1955) in the header; that's more to serve as a guide for players who had 20-year careers for 8 different clubs or something like
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Awkward flow here – I would move everythingi up to "Hall of Fame" into the first paragraph, since that all concerns his educational experience, and drop the square dancing thing, which is tangential at
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Some MOS stuff, as well as prose that I think can be tightened or moved around. Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. β€”
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virus months before his ultimate death, and had continued to suffer health issues from the virus even after his supposed recovery."
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You don't need to mention "until 1958" in the first sentence, as that's mentioned later, and it's more logical to put at the end
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Reworded. "Professional" is unnecessary, and "former" is not used for deceased players (only for ones who are retired). β€”
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No comma needed after "High School", and you can get rid of the mid-sentence ref since it also appears at the end
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Done. I tacked it onto the end of the second sentence (which was only four words long) – hope that's alright. β€”
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Already mentioned in the infobox. And 0–0 is not significant enough to be included in the prose. β€”
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There's a lot of repetition in the lede para. Might I suggest something like: "an American former
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thanks very much for the review! I hope I've addressed your comments satisfactorily. β€”
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Only one image is present; it's public domain and obviously relevant to the article
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Removed and merged with second sentence (since the opening sentence of just
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Start the third sentence with "Both of his parents were Polish immigrants:"
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looks good, the only reason one is at 11.5% is because of proper nouns
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Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the
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No concerns with stability, the last edit was on May 6
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Please mention his major league career final record
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