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Link South China Sea, Malaya, Borneo, the Netherlands East Indies, coast watchers, signal intelligence, oil tanker, freighter, sea lane, destroyer, Burma, Thailand, typhoon, cruiser, destroyer escorts, anti-submarine hunter-killer, light cruiser, landing craft, patrol boat, minesweeper, beached,
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While a large number of Japanese aircraft were detected on radar, and 15 which were evacuating Imperial Japanese Army Air Force personnel from Luzon were shot down, no attack was made against the American
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Please note that I'm going to be travelling for the next week, and probably won't be able to respond to any further comments here during this time.
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Identified only two sentences previously. This is a persistent problem throughout, use some pronouns and synonyms to mix things up.
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Since the date was mentioned in the previous sentence, I'd suggest that it be replaced with something like "That same day".
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My jet lag addled brain seems to have missed your extra comments! I've now actioned them - thanks again.
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Might be worth clarifying that the aircraft from the carriers attacked rather than the ships themselves.
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Done (it's probably easier for you to make these kind of small obvious fixes yourself :) )
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Already know the name and where it's going; delete South China Sea. And again:
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All done, except "coast watchers" for which we don't have a generic article
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I'd say "on", not "at" myself, but is this an AussieEng thing?
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Good point, especially as the surface sweep didn't succeed.
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Tell the reader that the Independence was a light carrier.
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I think this is misspelled, but it's not really AmEng.--
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combat air patrol, heavy cruiser, minelayer, floatplane
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At the time of the South China Sea Raid the Third Fleet
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were to attack the Japanese fleet and attack shipping
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And again: 229:during the night on 9/10 January 212:"Shipping on" sounds a bit odd. 310:"begin the attack, but it..." 1: 617:02:15, 21 February 2017 (UTC) 550:00:09, 21 February 2017 (UTC) 528:22:48, 11 February 2017 (UTC) 403:The Fleet's aircraft carriers 207:shipping at Formosa and Luzon 184:Images appropriately licensed 504:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 490:02:43, 3 February 2017 (UTC) 474:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 455:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 433:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 396:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 369:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 345:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 323:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 301:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 279:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 259:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 222:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 200:06:13, 5 February 2017 (UTC) 176:01:25, 28 January 2017 (UTC) 161:01:25, 28 January 2017 (UTC) 166:I'll get to this shortly.-- 697: 181:No DABs, external links OK 681:07:19, 6 March 2017 (UTC) 659:23:29, 5 March 2017 (UTC) 649:Where are we with this?-- 635:07:19, 6 March 2017 (UTC) 598:07:19, 6 March 2017 (UTC) 575:07:19, 6 March 2017 (UTC) 419:Before dawn on 12 January 308:begin the attack but this 18:Talk:South China Sea raid 330:around Christmas 1944., 313:I've deleted "this" 585:awkward, rephrase 540:I've now returned 288:comma after Fleet 89: 88: 688: 670: 648: 606: 584: 561: 539: 517: 441: 420: 416: 410: 404: 383: 379: 353: 331: 309: 287: 245: 230: 208: 139: 130: 111: 43:Copyvio detector 31: 696: 695: 691: 690: 689: 687: 686: 685: 664: 642: 533: 511: 231:"of", not "on" 120: 97: 91: 85: 57: 29: 22: 21: 20: 12: 11: 5: 694: 692: 684: 683: 640: 639: 638: 637: 602: 601: 600: 579: 578: 577: 553: 552: 509: 508: 507: 506: 478: 477: 476: 459: 458: 457: 437: 436: 435: 412: 406: 400: 399: 398: 375: 374: 373: 372: 371: 349: 348: 347: 327: 326: 325: 305: 304: 303: 283: 282: 281: 263: 262: 261: 241: 240: 239: 238: 237: 226: 225: 224: 204: 203: 202: 185: 182: 165: 140: 87: 86: 84: 83: 78: 73: 67: 64: 63: 59: 58: 56: 55: 53:External links 50: 45: 39: 36: 35: 28: 25: 23: 15: 14: 13: 10: 9: 6: 4: 3: 2: 693: 682: 678: 674: 668: 667:Sturmvogel 66 663: 662: 661: 660: 656: 652: 651:Sturmvogel 66 646: 636: 632: 628: 624: 620: 619: 618: 614: 610: 609:Sturmvogel 66 605:reconnoitring 603: 599: 595: 591: 587: 586: 580: 576: 572: 568: 564: 563: 560: 555: 554: 551: 547: 543: 537: 536:Sturmvogel 66 532: 531: 530: 529: 525: 521: 515: 514:Sturmvogel 66 505: 501: 497: 493: 492: 491: 487: 483: 482:Sturmvogel 66 479: 475: 471: 467: 463: 462: 460: 456: 452: 448: 444: 443: 438: 434: 430: 426: 422: 421: 413: 407: 401: 397: 393: 389: 385: 384: 376: 370: 366: 362: 358: 357: 356: 355: 350: 346: 342: 338: 334: 333: 328: 324: 320: 316: 312: 311: 306: 302: 298: 294: 290: 289: 284: 280: 276: 272: 268: 267: 264: 260: 256: 252: 248: 247: 242: 235: 234: 233: 232: 227: 223: 219: 215: 211: 210: 205: 201: 197: 193: 189: 188: 186: 183: 180: 179: 178: 177: 173: 169: 168:Sturmvogel 66 163: 162: 158: 155: 152: 148: 147:Sturmvogel 66 145: 141: 138: 137: 133: 128: 124: 119: 118: 114: 109: 105: 101: 96: 95: 82: 79: 77: 74: 72: 69: 68: 66: 65: 60: 54: 51: 49: 46: 44: 41: 40: 38: 37: 32: 26: 19: 641: 510: 411:from "which" 164: 153: 143: 142: 135: 131: 117:Article talk 116: 112: 93: 90: 81:Instructions 559:Ernest King 104:visual edit 48:Authorship 34:GA toolbox 144:Reviewer: 71:Templates 62:Reviewing 27:GA Review 157:contribs 76:Criteria 127:history 108:history 94:Article 673:Nick-D 645:Nick-D 627:Nick-D 590:Nick-D 583:force. 567:Nick-D 542:Nick-D 520:Nick-D 496:Nick-D 466:Nick-D 447:Nick-D 425:Nick-D 388:Nick-D 361:Nick-D 337:Nick-D 315:Nick-D 293:Nick-D 291:Fixed 271:Nick-D 251:Nick-D 214:Nick-D 192:Nick-D 588:Done 565:Done 464:Done 445:Done 423:Done 386:Done 359:Done 332:typo 236:Fixed 190:Done 136:Watch 16:< 677:talk 655:talk 631:talk 623:uses 613:talk 594:talk 571:talk 546:talk 524:talk 500:talk 486:talk 470:talk 451:talk 429:talk 392:talk 365:talk 341:talk 319:talk 297:talk 275:talk 255:talk 218:talk 196:talk 172:talk 151:talk 123:edit 100:edit 679:) 657:) 633:) 615:) 596:) 573:) 548:) 526:) 502:) 488:) 472:) 453:) 431:) 394:) 367:) 343:) 321:) 299:) 277:) 257:) 220:) 198:) 174:) 159:) 125:| 106:| 102:| 675:( 669:: 665:@ 653:( 647:: 643:@ 629:( 611:( 592:( 569:( 544:( 538:: 534:@ 522:( 516:: 512:@ 498:( 484:( 468:( 449:( 427:( 390:( 363:( 339:( 317:( 295:( 273:( 253:( 216:( 194:( 170:( 154:· 149:( 132:· 129:) 121:( 113:· 110:) 98:(

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