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in the body: "Construction began on 15 March 1904", but in the infobox: "Laid down: 11 May 1905". I'm not a ships expert, so I don't know, but is there a difference between commencing construction and "laid down"? If not, then the dates are inconsistent. If there is, then the body doesn't mention the
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in the lead "Андрей Первозванный — St Andrew the First-Called". I think the emdash here should either be unspaced, or be replaced by an endash;
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