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Hi, I've given the article a thorough rewrite to bring it into line with encyclopedic language, plus removed explict references to the materials whose source is the creator of the HeavyWeight practice. Also, I've been working on summarizing the story of the founder's training. Thanks so much for your
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Read through the article again and look out for this kind of unencyclopedic material - other examples include "she had to overcome yoga students' perceptions of a typical instructor's body size" and "Free in-home instruction of HeavyWeight Yoga is available." Keep up the good work!
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