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throughout the page. It could use a bit of copyediting to address flow, and also problems of short paragraphs scattered in the article. There are twenty-seven images used in this article - these could use an image review for each. It probably might make some sense to trim some of these images to not
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It's over-stating things a bit to say that the "federal government moved to Canberra on 9 May 1927" - although the parliament moved to Canberra at this time, most government departments remained in Melbourne until well after World War II, with some departments not completing their move to Canberra
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It should be noted that only a relatively small part of modern Canberra was designed by Burley Griffin - statements such as "Canberra is a planned city that was originally designed by Walter Burley Griffin, a major 20th century American architect" overstate his influence on the city's overall
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There was way too much information about Canberra's railroad history, which is a subject of little importance to the city given that it's never had more than a single train station and some temporary lines built only to move construction material around - I've trimmed this
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Featured article criteria of concern brought up in the FAR section include referencing, reference formatting, copyediting and image concerns.
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Yellowmonkey has asked that I comment on this article. I think that it's in very good shape, and my only comments are:
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Need to change it so mean the inner-city centre, as the recent sprawl has nothing to do with him. Good catch
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in the Urban Structure section there are a number of paragraphs without a citation at all;
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some of the citations are just bare url chains which should be formatted;
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the headings in the References section should be capitalised per
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Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at
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vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll
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vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll
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vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll
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until the 1980s! (this is identified in the next para)\
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All my concerns have been addressed. Well done, YM.
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some of the web citations are lacking access dates;
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