365:), although never actually directly supported it. Anyway, re RetiredDuke's plot comments, it probably verges into OR / fanboy speculation to answer some of those, unfortunately, and if you found it difficult to comprehend, rest assured that people who watched the show weren't much better off. For what Margaret does with the information about the book: travel to Gazth-Sonika herself, hire lackeys. (This is eventually stated later in the paragraph, so maybe it could be moved up? On the other hand, this doesn't happen until halfway through the show, so might be misleading to mention Margaret's travel there too early.) Why does Carrossea do weird roguey things? Because he's a hard-to-predict dark horsey character. (Eventually, you find out he was friends with Margaret / had a childhood crush on her, but that's covered already.) Gazth-Sonika is only referred to as one country/place. It's reasonable to guess based on the name that maybe one region is Gazth, and another region is Sonika (a la Bosnia-Herzogovinia), but if so, this distinction never comes up in the show and never matters. Not sure if there's a phrasing that makes that clear. (what IS relevant is that Nafrece = Europe = 1st world country, Gazth-Sonika = Central Asia = nobody cares about it, sell arms there, anything goes... but maybe that's more useful for "Themes"). It's a civil war confined to Gazth-Sonika, and yes, both sides are run by the same dark hand because, well, he's a villain and does things like that (but the sides aren't "Gazth" and "Sonika" to be clear, it's not even made clear what their ideologies are, it's not really important to the show). You might think the war is pivotal to the show, but it really isn't! It's an excuse for there to be people to hire Madlax and for there to be armed people to shoot, and to prove what a psychotic baddie the villain is. Very little is learned of the actual fortunes of the war. For why Quanzitta knows about the book, and why people know she knows, uh, that's a good question, it's just a plot point that she's the next person to visit, I guess she has a reputation as a sage or the like, this is getting into nitpicking a weird & convoluted plot. I don't know if the book itself is magical, but the words in the book are, they're the ritual/spell/something to unleash humanity's caged self or some such nonsense. I suppose that's currently covered by "Enfant's leader Friday Monday possesses supernatural powers connected to the three ancient books" but that could probably be made more explicit. Anyway, I don't know if that helps, but maybe might help somebody trying to give the "Plot" section some rewriting some context?
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227:(on the gigantic side), we can see that these leads deal with the real world perspective of the respective series, citing releases, channels, adaptations, sequels, casting, critical responseā¦ all stuff that is about āāthe impact it has had in the real worldāā ā quote from MOS:REALWORLD. Madlaxās lead is basically a summary of the series plot.
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