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212:"Talking Heads were an American new wave band" - I am not American but my understanding is that American English would say "Talking Heads was an American new wave band". This applies in a number of other places eg "their debut", so probably worth confirming with someone American :-)
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950:"which managed to chart". At what position did it chart, and in which territory? America, the UK, elsewhere? If you can't find any way to easily work this into the prose, just stick it in a note at the bottom.
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Thanks so much for the comments! Hope everything looks good.
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