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302: 373:"Despite their early success," – This is hard to explain, but "despite" is really more of a concurrent thing than a chronological thing. For example, "Despite having more touchdowns than interceptions, Player X's passer rating was still the worst in the nation." But "Despite winning four games in a row, the team lost it's fifth game" doesn't really work, because it's implying more of a connection than there really is. 222:{{cite news |last=Swan |first=Gary |date=September 19, 1996 |url=http://www.sfgate.com/sports/article/Carolina-s-Davis-Has-His-Hands-Full-Again-2965647.php |title=Carolina's Davis Has His Hands Full Again / Former 49ers corner renews duel with Rice |newspaper=] |oclc=137344428 |accessdate=January 19, 2013}} 216:{{cite journal |last=Hoffer |first=Richard |date=October 28, 1991 |url=http://sportsillustrated.cnn.com/vault/article/magazine/MAG1140299/index.htm |title=The Franchise |journal=] |location=New York |publisher=] |pages=64-66, 70, 72-73 |volume=75 |issue=19 |issn=0038-822X |accessdate=April 28, 2013}} 185:
The reference gives the publishing date as January 5, 2012, while the source states that it was published January 5, 2011. Also, this reference uses day-month-year format, while all others use month-day-year format. You need to change this one to match. Also,
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to get this to FA status. I've noticed there are a great deal of soccer clubs that have attained that milestone, but no American football clubs have ever done so.
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You'll want to have at least some summary of the "Culture" and "Ownership and administration" section somewhere in the lead. Generally speaking, anything meriting its own section in the article deserves some mention in the
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I don't know if "representing" is technically correct here. Although they are in the area, they don't represent the area in the same way as a college team would represent a university or a national team would represent a
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Wikilink for the NFC South should probably include "division" as well, to make it more intuitive as to where it goes. Also, since "southern" isn't the proper name of the division, I don't think it should be
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Sorry, this took me so long. With my own review and a poorly planned out series of tests in school, I haven't had much time to work on this. Comments on next three sources above. More to come. -
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The link leads to the upcoming 2013 season's schedule, and I can't find the 1996 schedule, so I can't provide comments on this one, except to fix the link.
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The first sentence of the second paragraph says they had success in their first "several years", but I think most would agree that two is not "several".
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doesn't say so explicitly, I think it would be a good idea to include an inline citation for the value statement, since it is specific and it cites
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I'll try to continue this later, but I'm losing internet connection right now, so try to fix these six right now. -
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has anything specific on it, but it seems like there should be a "$ " somewhere in "USD 1 billion".
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I've done all of these now except the last; I'd be glad for you to fix those hyphens for me.
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In many win–loss records and scores in the article, there are hyphens where there should be
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Since I have nothing better to do right now, I'll review the article's references.
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I would consider adding the effective date of the document, which is July 16, 2002.
376:"would not have another winning season" – "did not have another winning season" 308:
I'll be adding some comments, mostly about style and phrasing, etc. in a bit.
230:, and you've already linked to Sports Illustrated above, so remove the link. 364:"The Panthers uniforms" – Include possessive apostrophe after "Panthers"? 234: 383:. This would remove the wikilink in the next sentence to that article. 214:
This one needs to be changed to cite journal, not cite web. Use this:
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This needs to be changed to cite news instead of cite web. Use this:
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I've fixed those notes; I sympathize with your test plight. :)
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Needs to be cite news again. And the Chicago Tribune has ISSN
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Again, needs to be converted to cite news. The author is the
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Same as 2, except the date for this one is January 1, 2000.
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