174:: I enjoyed reading this article, partly because it is the first article about Nigeria that I've seen come through peer review. I encourage you to keep adding to the encyclopedia. The article is broad in coverage, neutral, stable, reasonably well-illustrated, and generally follows Knowledge style guidelines, and I think it is pretty close to GA. The prose needs polishing here and there, and I made quite a few small proofing and copy-editing changes as I went along. For example, I added metric-imperial conversions and changed hyphens to en dashes in page ranges and date ranges. Here are a few suggestions for further improvement.
188:"The Nike people were allies to the Aro people during the slave trade (an Igbo group) who controlled the trade in slaves in the Enugu area, while horses, used for rituals by the Igbo, were dealt by the Hausa traders." - Awkward because "slave trade" isn't an Igbo group. Suggestion: "The Nike people were allied with the Aro people, an Igbo group that controlled slave trading in the Enugu area. The Hausa provided horses, used for rituals by the Igbo."
213:"Other weather conditions affecting the city include Harmattan, a dusty trade wind that lasts a few weeks in the month of December and ends a few weeks into January." - Technically, a single month doesn't have as many as "a few" weeks. Perhaps re-phrasing this to say, "a dusty trade wind lasting a few weeks in the months of December and January" would be better.
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The tools in the toolbox at the top of this review page find three links that go to disambiguation pages instead of their intended targets and one dead url in the citations. Also, it's always good to add alt text, meant for readers who can't see the images, to the image information. The alt-text tool
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In the lead, it's not generally necessary to have too many citations. Opinions do vary among
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Article. I would also like another 'set of eyes' on this article as I have been the only significant contributor from the time it has been significantly expanded.
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British and American spellings. These should be consistent. Does Nigerian English use British spellings? If so, the article should reflect
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183:"The first settlement in the Enugu area was the small Nike village of Ogui." - Would it be possible to give a date for settlement or dates for the slave trade? Otherwise, readers simply have to guess what "early" means.
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A possibility for expansion is to include a bit more about the geology of the region. How old are the underlying rocks, and how did they get there? What kind of coal is this, how old, how extensive?
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252:"It is estimated that the project will cost ₦4.13bn." - Could this be expressed in U.S. dollars as well? Most readers will not have any idea what ₦4.13bn means in terms of their own economies.
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