511:"As an educated women intimately familiar with art and culture, Cameron was a Christian thinker familiar with medieval art, the Renaissance, and the Pre-Raphaelites". – This sentence doesn't seem to hang together. It seems to suggest that because she was educated she was a Christian thinker. I think if you lose the "As" at the beginning it will work, but you might replace one of the two "familiars" in the sentence.
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363:"a literary and artistic salon "of Pre-Raphaelite painters, poets, and aristocrats with artistic pretensions"." – better to keep the references in numerical order. And my own view (not shared by everyone) is that if you're quoting someone in the text you should say in the text whom you're quoting.
214:"Calcutta's Anglo-Indian upper-class" – I tread carefully here, but I think many people take "Anglo-Indian" to mean mixed race, and the OED rather gives support to this view. (It gives one usage as "A person of British descent born or living in India" but adds "Now rare".)
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This is a splendid article, with the potential for GA and even FA, I think. It's a substantial piece and will take me two or three goes to deal with it. These comments are down to the end of the
Biography sections.
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I enjoyed the Woolf quotation, but I think reviewers at FAC will question whether the views attributed to
Cameron in a work of fiction should be quoted almost as if they represent the real Cameron's views.
258:"a page of Marie Antoinette" – Though one has a page of a book, I think in this sense the usual preposition is "to". ("Jack Falstaff, now Sir John, a boy, and page to Thomas Mowbray, Duke of Norfolk")
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I've listed this article for peer review because I have made substantial improvements in the last few months largely on my own and am looking for another set of eyes on it.
261:"sisters — known" – the Manual of Style prescribes either spaced en-dashes – thus – or unspaced em-dashes—thus. Spaced em-dashes, which you have used here, are proscribed.
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Thanks so much for this review. I think i've addressed everything here. Your changes and suggestions were all valuable and definitely helped improve the article.
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