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Psychiatry possesses a inherent capacity for abuse that is greater than in other areas of medicine.:65 The diagnosis of mental disease can give the state license to detain persons against their will and insist upon therapy both in the interest of the detainee and in the broader interests of
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This is an excellent and really well researched article, however, I think it would require a lot of work for it to reach FA status. The two most significant issues are the article length and copyediting. Please bear in mind when reading these comments that this is my first peer review.
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Psychiatric Hospital” in the article. The term needs to be explained when it is first introduced. What does "Special Psychiatric Hospital" mean in this instance in what sense was the Sychevka hospital analogous to the one in Leningrad?
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The presentation here I think lacks a bit of clarity as it moves from 365 people and "surely hundreds more" to "thousands" to "two thousand cases" to "twenty thousand" to "fifteen or twenty thousand". Does the 365 figure refer to known individuals detained?
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Serbsky Center - if this becomes a FA and is on the Main Page, it would be good to have a free image there. MOS says to have an image in the lead too.
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414:. There are many one-sentence paragraphs in the article. The use of such paragraphs should be minimized and only used where it is necessary to lay emphasis on a particular point. See
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Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see
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A precursor of later abuses in psychiatry in the Soviet Union and the most somber event in the history of
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