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References section, and with years of publication when those mean very little in the ever-evolving online world. I wouldn't withhold support over this but presentation-wise and for ease of access (click once) I think it’d be preferable to use the news and web citation templates inline, and just retain Harv cites for the book refs. Cheers,
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I've been using this sfn/harvid combination for sources for years, including plenty of FAs, and no-one has ever mentioned it before. With websites the short citation indicates when the website was accessed without having to look at the long citation. I've italicised the newspaper citation, which was
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Okay, the formatting isn’t so odd when I see we’re using Harv... ;-) I think that’s probably better restricted to citing books, where your identifier is author and year of publication – it does seem a bit strange to be citing websites and newspapers with titles in standard case, when those same
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Not quite - since the engravings are not covered by FOP, we need to include an explicit tag indicating that they are out of copyright due to age. In theory we could quibble over whether the photographer has any copyright claim at all, but I'm not too fussed about that piece.
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Sources look okay reliability-wise (have to admit I'm not sure entirely sure about Lock at first glance but it's not being used to cite anything controversial); the formatting of some refs looks a bit odd to me though, and I might just have a go at them
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Well you can only go with what's available -- if you've checked them as well as the other sources you've employed then I think you've done as much as can be expected. I note that the article is almost 1kb larger than when I first looked anyway. Cheers,
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Gallipoli and covering force could be removed along with the 2nd sentence of the 2nd para
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Phillip Davey was a South
Australian soldier who was awarded both the Victoria Cross and the Military Medal for his gallantry during World War I. The article includes all information from all unique sources I have been able to locate, including the
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873:. There is a mention of a daughter, but I've checked BDM records, and there aren't any children registered against him, just his own birth and the marriage. I think this addresses the last of the outstanding comments.
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European front after the end of the Gallipoli campaign?
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Morphettville (where the original 10th Battalion trained) then the last couple of months at the Mitcham camp, but his records don't specify.
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and his battalion history. It successfully went through GAN last year. He is the second South
Australian VC recipient I have brought to ACR, with the eventual aim of getting all of them to FA.
698:"On 15 March 1917, Davey was accidentally wounded by a hand grenade...": I think this probably would have been around Ypres just following the German withdrawal to the Hindenburg Line?
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I considered the headstone to be a sculpture that required a degree of artistic craftsmanship (the engraving etc), but I'm not wedded to it (the tag that is). Regards,
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Australian VC recipient bios, a very worthy project, indeed! In regards to this article I have the following suggestions:
481:: I'm not sure on what basis you are suggesting this pic needs a FoP tag? I don't think a gravestone engraving qualifies as a work of art. Please advise. Cheers,
545:, engravings aren't covered by FoP in Australia. If there are thousands of similar stones, I would guess those engravings are both derivative works?
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I've added a PD-AustraliaGov for the Rising Sun badge and a PD-UKGov for the
Victoria Cross, along with some explanations. Does that do the trick?
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Despite its age, Lock is still the go-to history of the 10th. Esp for bios of important characters and day-by-day movements of the battalion.
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