119:"In 2002, due to an excess of on-screen talent after buying World Championship Wrestling (WCW), WWE enforced its Brand Extension in which on-screen employees were assigned to work on one of two television programs that were promoted as "brands" (like conferences in the National Football League) of WWE, Raw and SmackDown!" Sorry but I don't understand what you're trying to get at here. I think this needs rewording. Neither does there seem to be a main sentence, other then "WWE enforced its Brand Extension". Enforced it to do what?
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