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According to the source, she "could be both a patron and a pill, exerting her control" and was involved in several lawsuits with family and neighbors over money matters. Contentious, i.e. "exhibiting an often perverse and wearisome tendency to quarrels and disputes" (Merriam-Webster, online) seems to
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The article does need to be tightly focused on the subject - obviously family is relevant, but her mother shouldn't be treated as the primary subject, her coverage should be in relation to
Elisabeth. It starts to read like it's the other way around here. I'll read it again to see if there's anything
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I do not understand your direction. Elisabeth's birth information does come first, and then a discussion of her family origins. This is typical in biographies to set the context. I have relabeled the section to include "family" and moved the start of commentary on her mother to a new paragraph. If
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One by one, the brothers went to the United States, where they created a successful international tobacco business, with Joseph in New
Orleans; Pierre working along the Gulf Coast; Jules operating in Veracruz, Mexico; Ernest located in Antwerp; and eventually Edouard settling into the business in
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As an aside, I did look at whether there was enough information to do a separate article on the mother and concluded not. I felt that if one were created, the result of an AfD discussion would be to merge the information into an article on her daughter or grandsons. Perhaps it wouldn't have, but
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Elisabeth's mother likely wouldn't manage an article of her own, and the little rearrangements have improved how that part reads. I also find the legacy
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The article uses nothing written by an editor at Find A Grave, merely a photograph which lists their names and dates on their tombstone and confirming their burial place. That the stone is actually in that particular cemetery is confirmed by the
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capture that. I have changed it to "They lived with
Peillon, but the relationship was difficult because of her controlling and litigious nature", but if that is unsatisfactory, please make a suggestion and I'll be happy to consider it.
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Early life: Most of this is about her mother, which belongs in a different section (family, ancestry, or something similar). Separating out the details of
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Nr. 94 2016 article. If there were another record available, giving Joseph's death date, I would have used it, but at this time, have found nothing.
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