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separate section. That said, the social inequality section still needs rewriting; racism by small extremist groups is not really social inequality, which is more about income divides, divides in general living conditions, etc. stratified by ethnicity. It is worth noting that
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Inequality in the United States as mentioned previously, they have a lot of words hyperlinked, so even if you think it may be excessive, do not be afraid to continue to do so! Finally, as mentioned before, I would look for more peer reviewed articles. I think what you have is a great start for information and structure, and now you need to go a little more in depth with deeper information.
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Looking at previous comments, I would like to agree with what has already been said. Some of the sentence structure is a little awkward to read at times. However, I do like the way the material is presented. You follow all of the
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I rewrote the article to follow a more encylopaedic style of writing. I also found that in general, the writing was quite biased, with certain sentences taking their sources out of context, or drawing conclusions from sources not made by those sources. I also felt that social inequality deserved a
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This is a great start to an article and the
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Substantively, I think this is good. However, the structure to the writing is a little awkward at times and needs revision. It did not feel like a
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