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375:. The Hindu, 14 January 1994", with the blue-link portion being the title of the article. That way, even if the link moves in the future, we know exactly the name/date/publisher of the article and can find it if need be. That goes for most of your footnotes which are articles, though your "list of awardess" type footnotes are fine, except you want to add "at XYZ.com" or "at the Ministry of Culture (India)" in unlinked text afterwards so the reader can tell
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Greetings, you added categories, but none of them were funcational categories (working links show up blue, non working as red). I fixed your categories for you, rather than be coy and try to get you to do it. You still haven't made your footnotes in-line footnotes: footnotes go at the end of the
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you're going to need one or two more neutral, third-party footnotes to verify statements made in the article. Just add the footnote at the end of the specific sentence(s) borne out by the footnote. Also, in the lede you refer to it as "fore-most"; isn't that totally subjective? Best to replace
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union who operated in the shadows of Unite Union, and as such find it difficult to be found. Thanks for noticing the name, I will correct this if it is worth continuing with the process. thanks again Emma
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