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and start following the rabbit-hole down to get an idea for which sub-sub-sub categories to add. There are probably categories like "Musical groups from Hawaii", "Folk-rock musical groups" etc., but you just have to look and see what's out there. After that, you'll be ready to publish; good work on
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references from established books/media/news discussing the person's achievements. You have one good one from an Aussie newspaper, so please find a few more links like it to help build your case. Will check back in in about 12hrs or so, so please read the
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What you want to do instead is take a look at that long list of books/articles used to write the WP article, and footnote individual sentences of the WP article to the source which proves that statement. Footnotes on WP aren't for "by the way, here's an interesting point", they're academic-style
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I made some initial formatting fixes; hit the article's "History" tab and use the "difference" buttons to see what changed from your draft to mine. Please continue to make the changes I did (unbracketing links, bulleting lists with an asterisk, etc). Note also you need to add categories
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I added a few "tags" at the top to suggest improvements, but the main thing that would really help is if you apply footnotes to indicate which references prove/verify which statements made in the article: "John Smith graduated from university in 1948 with a BA in anthropology.<ref:
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Hi, I'm currently an intern at HMV Canada and was asked to recreate this article because of a lack of reliable, significant sources, as well as being too promotional, I think that it is ready for another edit, please let me know what else I can change/ add! Thanks :)
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That would be great! My whole problem to begin with was not really understanding that from the start, if you could chop at it to put it online that would be fantastic, and if any additions are needed in the future we'll just post to Talk. Thanks again!
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Created a page for the word 'Anogen', which is a trade name of a company named yes biotech labs. This is my first new page. Please take a look, and see if anything need to be changed. Thank you in advance for your reviews.
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This person is a doctor, scientist, inventor, author and fashion socialite. About to be founder and co-head of a centre for engineering surgical products, and Assoc. Professor. Is this sufficiently notable?
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Greetings, I've got to get to bed, but I've made some minor format upgrades, added maintenance tags (they're not criticism, they're for your reference as to things to work on), etc.
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