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does not operate on a system of "support" and "oppose" votes, so that comment does not matter. However, it has been well over one month since the review was posted, and editors still have not addressed the concerns raised in this review. I am therefore going to remove the listing of this article from
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due to my busy schedule these days (new job, new office etc ..) i am hardly available on wikipedia, on the coming weekend i will try resolving all the issues by following the suggestions given by above Users, if i failed this time, then i will withdraw the GA nomination voluntarily and will nominate
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Government: The statement "Pakistan is a semi-presidential federal democratic republic with Islam as the state religion" seems like it would be a better lead statement for that first paragraph, instead of the last sentence there. e.g. introduce what
Pakistan's government is first, and then get into
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Lead section: Reasonably good. There's a couple of minor issues. First, does this statement really need a citation: "Pakistan, officially the
Islamic Republic of Pakistan, is a country in South Asia."? It seems pretty obvious and easily verifiable. As a matter of fact, three of the citations in the
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The 'Economy' section could be written better. There's some fairly broad, generalized statements like "Pakistan has a semi-industrialized economy" and "Pakistan is a rapidly developing country", yet the presence of multiple citations on statements like this lead me to believe that there's more
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Demographics/languages: The languages subsection seems to be pertinent and reasonably well-cited. However, the image to the right of the section outlining the locations of major ethnic groups only fits the section somewhat marginally, since the section doesn't tie in the languages spoken with
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Images: Is the flag image and the coat of arms image actually public domain and GFDL images? I would think that digital version of those images would be owned by the government of
Pakistan? Though I think that Knowledge (XXG) can still legitimately use them -- the copyright tags may not be
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676:. Not only is this a direct copyvio but the information is also outdated (the data on that webpage has not been updated after 2006). I'm sorry but the article is in pathetic condition and looking at the pace of improvement, it is going to take months before the article is any good. So,
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Pakistan: The section only contains a template containing geographic links to bordering nations. I would recommend moving this template to the bottom of the 'geography and climate' section, instead of including it as a section with no text. Sections without text are
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Mostly passes on this account. I made a few minor copyedits, but there are no major issues. One thing that I saw a bit of is in the placement of citations -- citations should be placed immediately after punctuation marks, with no space between, and not in the middle of
587:. Please note that there cannot be any copy-paste jobs in the article. Also, Knowledge (XXG) is an encyclopedia, therefore the information should be factual and up-to-date. Also, I believe that given the magnitude and the implications of the
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Education: The image of Punjab
University's campus is nice, but there is no text in the article discussing it. It might be a good idea to include some information on some of the top and/or more popular schools and colleges in
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Third paragraph: Seems to repeat "in the world" three times. The statement on second largest muslim population as well as second largest Shia muslim population is also somewhat repetitive. This makes for some awkward
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History section looks good, after a few minor copyedits. One concern is that there is an image of "The Priest King" at the top of the section, yet there is no mention of that, or of "Sindhi Ajruk", in the article
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Economy section but it seems that the changes made by me and others were reverted. As of now, much of the first para of the Economy section is a copy-paste job from the website of
429:"It has a 1,046 kilometres (650 mi) coastline..." -- "kilometres" really shouldn't be plural, though I see that a template is being used here for the km/mi conversion, so that is part of that issue.
517:, History, Governance, Geography (flora & fauna, outline template), Economy, Demographics, Culture (include Tourism and Sports here as subsections), Communications, Transportation, Military,
325:, though it's been several months, so whatever reasons the article was semi-protected may no longer apply now. It might be simply due to the violence and situation along the Afghanistan border?
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Would be nice to include some examples of some of the largest corporations and businesses in
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File:Malam Jabba P1010215.jpg -- Not a major issue, but there is a tag on this image that it has been moved to the
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The separate 'Military' section could probably be included as a subsection of 'Government', since it's related. Although
Wikiproject countries has it as its own section, so either is fine.
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The 'Flora and Fauna' section might be better included as a subsection within 'Geography and climate', as opposed to a separate section. The content seems very related.
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There is one 'citation needed' tag that needs to be addressed (see below). Most of the other citations are good, and information is reliable. I don't see any
450:"During the Soviet-Afghan War in the 1980s Pakistan was a major U.S. ally." -- This statement has a 'citation needed' tag that needs resolving prior to GA.
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thanks for ur review, ur suggestions were realy helpful, i hv worked on almost half of them and will work on rest of them shortly.
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